Elvis - I see that you have chosen to use a 2 even column grid, and it appears to work well here. However - what if you didn't have the word "Assets" to use? In fact - you really don't. This word is not meant to be used in the layouts (the title "assets" means "the following material is to be used"). Consider breaking up the layout a bit more, using larger fonts (since this is for web use - the normal body copy size is quite a bit larger than for print design) such as 14 - 18 pt body copy. And... I suggest you use "Central Asia Institute Mission" as the heading, and "Places" as a subheading. If you pay a bit more attention to bringing some expression into the typography, then we won't look at the large image so quickly - which is what I have in mind for this project. The image can be used, but in a subtle way, not emphasized quite so much. Yes - this forces you to pay more attention to bringing "interest" into the layout and the words. I look forward to seeing how this changes - and what your peers might have to say about this work. Nice beginning!
Elvis, I really like how you used the photo as the background image, and that it does not clash with the text box. I also like the use of the vertical bar to separate the paragraphs. If anything, I would suggest maybe putting some more emphasis to the headings to add some more hierarchy to the text. Maybe by making them a larger size or adding a bold effect. Although the drop cap adds a nice effect to the body text, it almost makes me think that I must begin reading at the second paragraph rather than the left one. Since we read from left to right, it might be a little misleading. Maybe you could add the drop cap to the first letter of the left paragraph instead.
Hi Elvis! I like your color and typeface choices, but I don't understand why you put it all in the middle. I also don't think the bar works with its size, or opaqueness (maybe if you lowered the transparency it'd be nicer?). Maybe if you didn't put the word "Assets" as a title it could be better. As it stands, it looks like it's just blocking the picture.
Elvis - I see that you have chosen to use a 2 even column grid, and it appears to work well here. However - what if you didn't have the word "Assets" to use? In fact - you really don't. This word is not meant to be used in the layouts (the title "assets" means "the following material is to be used"). Consider breaking up the layout a bit more, using larger fonts (since this is for web use - the normal body copy size is quite a bit larger than for print design) such as 14 - 18 pt body copy. And... I suggest you use "Central Asia Institute Mission" as the heading, and "Places" as a subheading. If you pay a bit more attention to bringing some expression into the typography, then we won't look at the large image so quickly - which is what I have in mind for this project. The image can be used, but in a subtle way, not emphasized quite so much. Yes - this forces you to pay more attention to bringing "interest" into the layout and the words. I look forward to seeing how this changes - and what your peers might have to say about this work. Nice beginning!
ReplyDeleteElvis, I really like how you used the photo as the background image, and that it does not clash with the text box. I also like the use of the vertical bar to separate the paragraphs. If anything, I would suggest maybe putting some more emphasis to the headings to add some more hierarchy to the text. Maybe by making them a larger size or adding a bold effect. Although the drop cap adds a nice effect to the body text, it almost makes me think that I must begin reading at the second paragraph rather than the left one. Since we read from left to right, it might be a little misleading. Maybe you could add the drop cap to the first letter of the left paragraph instead.
ReplyDeleteHi Elvis! I like your color and typeface choices, but I don't understand why you put it all in the middle. I also don't think the bar works with its size, or opaqueness (maybe if you lowered the transparency it'd be nicer?). Maybe if you didn't put the word "Assets" as a title it could be better. As it stands, it looks like it's just blocking the picture.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the feedback, I will try to make the changes based on yours comments.
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